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News Credits: 2 · by **Tekka** » Fri Sep 21, 2007 4:35 pm

Updated today, finally, with Chapter 12. I wrote it on a plane! :grin:

Huzzah!

by **StarSwoop** » Wed Oct 10, 2007 6:15 am

really enjoyed it, more i say!

News Credits: 2 · by **Tekka** » Thu Oct 11, 2007 5:09 pm

Wow, a comment. Thank you for reading! As soon as I get over the current plot hurdle, which is causing me headaches with believability, I will get some more out!

by **Shadow Fox** » Thu Nov 15, 2007 6:12 am

Fan fiction, how I love it. Just finished reading the entire story and I have one thing to say about it...

Brilliant! I love this story! I be wanting more I tell you, MORE!!!

Ok, so that was more than one thing, but it's true. I slight suggestion if I may. At first i was a tad confused about the first conversation bit Skywarp was having with Melissa after she died until I cottoned on that it was a dream. A little something I do when writing fics as to put all dream/flashback sequences in italics with personal thoughts either in bold or un-italicised. It's just a thought, feel free to make of it what you wish.

Again, love the story and I'll be eager to see what happens next!

News Credits: 2 · by **Tekka** » Thu Nov 15, 2007 6:37 am

Thanks for reading! I'm glad you were confused, because that's what I was going for! :lol:

"What's going on here? ... OH! I get it!" I've been lazy as of late, but I will try to get more written up soon!

by **Shadow Fox** » Thu Nov 15, 2007 6:51 am

'I see...' said the blind man. I wasn't sure if was intentional or not. So long as you're prepared for some people who aren't that quick off the mark to figure it out, it's all good...

Damn straight you should put more up soon, I want to know how Skywarp tends to take out Starscream.

by **Dragonoth** » Wed Nov 21, 2007 4:11 pm

Awesome story! Aside from some errors with commas, I wish I could write like that! The "war protocol" and the changes in Skywarp's personality through seeing things from a human perspective have given me new material for my imagination. I am eagerly anticipating the continuation!

News Credits: 2 · by **Tekka** » Thu Nov 22, 2007 6:28 am

Thank you for reading. I'm so happy you liked it and I'm proud to have inspired you just a little. May I ask a favour though? If you have time would you be able to give me a list of some of those errors? I clearly haven't spotted them myself and I'd like to get them fixed.

News Credits: 2 · by **Tekka** » Thu Nov 22, 2007 9:50 am

Updated today with Chapter 13. Please, enjoy! Feedback would be welcome as I'm not 100% happy with this chapter. Let me know if you can suggest any improvements.

by **Shadow Fox** » Thu Nov 22, 2007 10:31 am

Woooooo, update!

Loved it, this fic is freaking awesome. Apart from showering you with praise, I really can't think of anything to comment on. I am curious to see if Unicron keeps his word or not and how exactly Skywarp will be changed if he gets his mind restored, considering it was the very thing he didn't want Shockwave to fix.

News Credits: 2 · by **Tekka** » Thu Nov 22, 2007 10:55 am

Skywarp didn't ask for it, and his attention wasn't focused on Unicron's voice at that point, all he wants to do is get Melissa away from Unicron. But Unicron can see the untapped potential, and he knows that every Decepticon, no matter how warped their programming may become, would always be tempted by more power. But it's not really an important point for the rest of the story, you will see why eventually.

Once again, thank you so much for reading. And it makes me happy to know I have at least one regular reader. You rock. :sad:

by **Shadow Fox** » Thu Nov 22, 2007 3:46 pm

Tekka wrote:Once again, thank you so much for reading. And it makes me happy to know I have at least one regular reader. You rock.

I know the feeling! I put fics up on ff.net and have pulled more than one down because absolutely no-one showed any interest in it. I like to think that if I just keep plodding along maybe one day the idea of karma will finally kick in

by **Depthscream** » Fri Jan 11, 2008 8:49 pm

I just read through the whole thing then. It's.... awesome? I'm not quite sure how to describe it, but I reckon it's great. For some reason I liked Skywarp dealing with all the human emotions and senses. I am looking forward to an update.

More people should read this, it is really remarkable.

News Credits: 2 · by **Tekka** » Sat Jan 12, 2008 4:45 am

Thank you very much for reading, and I appreciate the remarks. I've never had anything described as remarkable before, even though I know it needs work, thank you. Things have been slow lately with the holidays and I'm still largely put off from my writing. I will try to get an update out soon though.

by **christron101** » Tue Jan 22, 2008 9:43 am

Yeah! Please make an update soon, pleeeze! Skywarp is actually my favourite TF. I love your story, I put in my favourites and I am checking it every day for updates. You now have at least 2 regular readers! Is there any chance you could look at my new Fan-fic? Nobody seems to be looking so they don't know thereb will be a battle for supremacy yet. Oops I spoiled part of it. Oh well, please read it!

News Credits: 2 · by **Tekka** » Tue Jan 22, 2008 1:06 pm

I'd be happy to read it. Could you give me a link?

I'm working on a chapter, it's just tough not having it degrade into something I don't like. It's very hard writing for the cons because they're not the easily sociable types, and any interactions that don't involve scheming or bragging can easily be considered OOC.

by **christron101** » Wed Jan 23, 2008 10:51 am

You don't really need a link as it is on Seibertron a couple of threads down but here it is: Transformers: Outbreak

by **The Chronic** » Mon Jun 02, 2008 8:43 am

absolutly amazing, i fricking loved this and ill tell you why

GREAT characterization! (more than the whole of G1)

backstory, brothers, fathers, fembots, the history of the quintasons (which i allways hated- you have kind of turned that around)

humans that arnt maddenly annoying, even likeable/intersing

STARSCREAM

the story itself is brilliant and i cant wait to read more,
get on with it!

although i think i can predict who that is and i've got to say im a little sceptical -but you've done a great job so far and i was sceptical in the first place about a transformer being a human
mayby it can work the other way around

other than that there was one or two mistakes in there which i cant remember -there was an AD instead of AND near the end
and mayby you could list the other deceptacons who are with dirge so i can picture the scean in my mind

im not a great artist by a long shot but i might be interested in drawing a few picsfor ya, if not i think you should take a few pics to chuck into the story eg magnus silhouette as he opens the door to shockwave cell

oh and cant wait to hear form Scourge!

News Credits: 2 · by **Tekka** » Mon Jun 02, 2008 9:40 am

You are too kind.

I'm really glad I was able to convince you of the oodles of potential the Quintesson origin story has. I hope I'm doing it justice.

I read back through it myself and fixed a boat load of typos. Ideas have been popping in my head and I finally have an idea to get Skywarp to Cybertron without breaking the plot, and it was staring me in the face the whole time.

With any luck I can have a new chapter up tomorrow, or maybe even tonight if I work really hard.

Thank you, you have gotten me interested in my own writing again. :mrgreen:

by **The Chronic** » Mon Jun 02, 2008 10:08 am

brilliant! ill look forward to it
i take it you have a rough plan of the whole thing?

News Credits: 2 · by **Tekka** » Mon Jun 02, 2008 10:18 am

Yeah it's more or less planned out. But I've just been struggling with a few key points, but now I have a brilliant idea and I'm writing it up right now.

News Credits: 2 · by **Tekka** » Mon Jun 02, 2008 2:06 pm

A long time after losing my way and my interest I have returned and updated with a short chapter.

by **The Chronic** » Mon Jun 02, 2008 5:26 pm

yay!

been looking forward to this all day, hope theres more to come

by **The Chronic** » Mon Jun 02, 2008 6:17 pm

sorry im in the middle of reading -just remembered earlyer(2nd time?) you called dead end, wildrider, wanted to post befor i forgot agin

i had thought that would have been mellisa with unicron horns n'all
suppose he dose have horns though
little confused as to whos who with the whole cyclonus/scourge reversal but that way round makes much more sense

anyway back to it

“What are you SAYING?!”

News Credits: 2 · by **Tekka** » Mon Jun 02, 2008 6:40 pm

I keep finding more and more typos like "knuckled" and "fast" instead of "knuckles" and "fist". I don't understand how I keep making them!

I need to give it one more thorough read through tomorrow.